The diagram below show the changes that have t aken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

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The figures illustrate all the things which are changed over the years at West Park Secondary School since 1950.

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, the diagrams are showing the improvements taken place in

this

area in three different years which are 1950, 1980 and 2010.

School

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that

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represents the main structure, is always in the same place as when it was built.

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, the playground becomes smaller after 1980. In 1950 there were some houses next to the school and a large Farmland in front of them. The 3 houses were replaced by a car park and a science block and the Farmland by

sports

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the sports

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field.

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one was longer

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the whole parking and the science block. Another different thing is that in 2010, the parking become wider because it replaced a significant area of the sports field, which is still there but smaller than in 1980. The Science block is always the same size as it was built.

Also

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the Main Road in front of the buildings never changed.

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In some countries young people move in their own homes in early twenties, in other countries they live with parents longer. What do you think, do the advantages of living alone outweigh the disadvantages?

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