The diagram below show the changes that have t aken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

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The figures illustrate all the things which are changed over the years at West Park Secondary School since 1950.

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, the diagrams are showing the improvements taken place in

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area in three different years which are 1950, 1980 and 2010.

School

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A school

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that

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represents the main structure, is always in the same place as when it was built.

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, the playground becomes smaller after 1980. In 1950 there were some houses next to the school and a large Farmland in front of them. The 3 houses were replaced by a car park and a science block and the Farmland by

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the sports

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field.

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last

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one was longer

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the whole parking and the science block. Another different thing is that in 2010, the parking become wider because it replaced a significant area of the sports field, which is still there but smaller than in 1980. The Science block is always the same size as it was built.

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Also

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the Main Road in front of the buildings never changed.

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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The diagram below show the changes that have t aken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disargee?

In some countries, students are required to learn a foreign language, but in other countries, it is not necessary to do so. Discuss both approaches and give your own opinion.

Shops should not be allowed to sell any food or drinks that have been scientifically proven to be bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In today's world, people spend a lot of money on appearance because they want to look younger. Why is this happening? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?