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Being self-employed is better than being employed by a company or an organisation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#company #organisation
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There is an opinion that it is better to work independently than to be hired by a
company
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 or an institution.
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people
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 can enjoy several
benefits
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 by becoming independent
workers
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, I mainly disagree with
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 idea because
people
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 can get more opportunities for challenging
projects
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 and receive job security. Admittedly,
people
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 can obtain several
benefits
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 by being self-employed, one obvious thing of which may be the flexibility of working style. Since there is no need to confirm the boss’s opinions or arrange the schedule of employees,
people
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 can manage both job and private matters much easier/more accessible, especially enabling women to continue working.
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, at the same time,
people
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 are suffered from serious pressure because whether they can earn enough money completely/entirely depends on individual activities.
On the other hand
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, there seem to be more
benefits
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 in belonging to the
company
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.
Firstly
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, employees can obtain chances to tackle large
projects
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 because organisations have more credibility to receive offers and can create teams by bringing various skilled
people
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 together. These challenging tasks can provide a sense of accomplishment to the
workers
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.
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, there is better job security in the
company
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 because the responsibilities are shared by team members.
This
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 safe environment enables
workers
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 to challenge high-risk
projects
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. In conclusion,
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 independent
workers
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 can receive
benefits
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,
such
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 as flexible working, they tend to have severe pressure.
Conversely
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,
this
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 pressure can be lessened/ mitigated if
people
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 work at a
company
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 or an organisation,
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 more opportunities for rewarding
projects
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.
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, I believe belonging to enterprises is a better choice.
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