Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and gives your opinion.

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Advertising is the easiest way to sell your

products

. Some

people

believe that advertising does a good job of convincing consumers,

while

others argue that we don’t need advertisements anymore. In my opinion,

people

will keep advertising in the future. On the one hand,

people

care about money, but advertising

products

in newspapers or magazines cost them a lot of budgets.

For example

, my brother owned a stationery

shop

, and he wanted to market his

shop

to the local community.

Therefore

, he advertised through the newspaper and magazine for fifty thousand dollars per month.

Also

, he posted full-page illustrations in the newspaper and published introduction articles in the magazine.

However

this

effort attracted a few

people

to appreciate his store. In the end, only very few

people

came to his

shop

due to

those advertisements and he lost a lot of money.

On the other hand

people

emphasize their social networks, and

people

usually tend to purchase the same item with their friends. To be more specific, one day I saw a commercial post of a green

coat

on Instagram. When I hung out with my friend Emma I saw her wearing a beautiful green

coat

, which was the same brand I saw yesterday on Instagram. I was attracted by the colour and texture of her

coat

and I want to have similar clothes with my friend.

Therefore

, I ordered a

coat

in a different size and shape from that online

shop

Finally

, that

shop

sells another cloth to a new customer successfully. I agree with

this

opinion because I often purchase

products

in before mentioned situation. I might not need a

coat

my desire was aroused by my friend. In conclusion,

while

advertising costs

people

a lot of money, and may not have a strong result, I still believe that

people

are easily attracted by advertisements, and led them to buy

products

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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313 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

persuade
promote
attract
influence
impact
consumerism
commercialism
market
product
brand
endorsement
manipulative
saturated
overwhelmed
repetitive
distracting
irrelevant
exaggerated
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