Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and gives your opinion.

Advertising is the easiest way to sell your
products
. Some
people
believe that advertising does a good job of convincing consumers,
while
others argue that we don’t need advertisements anymore. In my opinion,
people
will keep advertising in the future. On the one hand,
people
care about money, but advertising
products
in newspapers or magazines cost them a lot of budgets.
For example
, my brother owned a stationery
shop
, and he wanted to market his
shop
to the local community.
Therefore
, he advertised through the newspaper and magazine for fifty thousand dollars per month.
Also
, he posted full-page illustrations in the newspaper and published introduction articles in the magazine.
However
,
this
effort attracted a few
people
to appreciate his store. In the end, only very few
people
came to his
shop
due to
those advertisements and he lost a lot of money.
On the other hand
,
people
emphasize their social networks, and
people
usually tend to purchase the same item with their friends. To be more specific, one day I saw a commercial post of a green
coat
on Instagram. When I hung out with my friend Emma I saw her wearing a beautiful green
coat
, which was the same brand I saw yesterday on Instagram. I was attracted by the colour and texture of her
coat
and I want to have similar clothes with my friend.
Therefore
, I ordered a
coat
in a different size and shape from that online
shop
.
Finally
, that
shop
sells another cloth to a new customer successfully. I agree with
this
opinion because I often purchase
products
in before mentioned situation. I might not need a
coat
my desire was aroused by my friend. In conclusion,
while
advertising costs
people
a lot of money, and may not have a strong result, I still believe that
people
are easily attracted by advertisements, and led them to buy
products
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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