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The graph below gives information about the sales of the three most commonly purchased items in a particular bakery for the year 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the sales of the three most commonly purchased items in a particular bakery for the year 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph provides information about the expenditures made at a bakery for a duration of 12 months, starting from
January
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 2014 to December 2014. The graph details the
sales
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 of three different bakery products, namely pies,
bread
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, and
buns
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. In terms of pie
sales
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, the expenses began with the lowest value of $10,000 in
January
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 and steadily increased until December when they peaked at $40,000. The expenditure made on
bread
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 and
buns
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sales
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 did not show a clear pattern.
Bread
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sales
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 amounted to $80,000 in
January
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 and decreased over the year.
Conversely
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,
buns
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sales
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 began at $40,000 in
January
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, witnessed a gradual increase in the next four months, and
then
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 declined again until December, when it reported $30,000. In conclusion, the line graph illustrates the expenditures incurred on pies,
bread
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, and
buns
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 at a bakery during 2014.
While
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 pie
sales
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 showed a steady increase,
bread
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 and
buns
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sales
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 did not follow a definite trend.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words january, sales, bread, buns with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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