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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this option? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children.

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There is no denying the fact that the main impact of
punishment
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 is arguable.
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 it is a commonly held belief that
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kids
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 should be
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punished
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 to understand what is right and what is wrong. The question is, do
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kids
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punishment
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 can help them to be distinct? and what type of
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 should be applied. From my perspective, I strongly believe that
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children should not be punished and
parents
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 can teach them by using other effective methods.
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. On the one hand, penalising juveniles can cause multiple psychological problems,
parents
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 must consider the
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 of the child and avoid punishing them because it might lead to
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disasterious
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disastrous
 effects. To illustrate, if the
parents
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 hit their
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, they will start to
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hate
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 them and neglect their
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and
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 might cause them to intend to totally reject their
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 in any advice that their
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 ask.
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, youngsters in their formative age,
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tend to refuse
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words
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 and find it challenging for them to obey
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the elderly.
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, the adults must treat them well and try to absorb their
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 quietly by teaching them
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manners without penalizing them. To illustrate, a prestigious journal article published that 70% of youngsters behaved
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oppositely
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 when their family punished them and 40% of them developed depression.
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, it becomes apparent that juveniles must be treated in a specific way without
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 in order to teach them right from wrong.
On the other hand
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, there are several methods to educate
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kids
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 to behave. To embark,
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parents
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 can educate their children by giving them advice in a creative way
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 as motivating them and giving them monetary
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 when they listen to them.
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,
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the family
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 can visit the family consultant to guide them and help them in how to treat their children.
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, some
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families
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 may face difficulty
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 with their young
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, so it would be a good idea to go to
specialist
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a specialist
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 who specialized in the treatment of
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 cases. Indeed,
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 will never help
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 to deal with their
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 as
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generations
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 required a special deal in order to obey their
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words
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. In conclusion, in my opinion, I strongly believe that
punishment
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not
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is not
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 a perfect treatment to guide
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kids
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.
This
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 is because
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 generation may need to guide them by
understand
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 their mind and
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 them.
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