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the charts below give information about levels of education in glasgow, a city in scotland, in 2010

the charts below give information about levels of education in glasgow, a city in scotland, in 2010
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The bar chart and pie charts illustrate the percentage of
people
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 in Glasgow having three levels of
education
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 (
university
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, school and those with no
qualifications
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) in 2010. Information is divided into five
age
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 groups in the bar chart and by gender in the pie charts.
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, the majority of
people
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 with
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university
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a university
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education
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 were in younger
age
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 groups,
while
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 in the oldest
age
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group
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 most
people
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 did not have any
qualifications
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. The proportions of men and women were similar and showed
ttle
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little
different
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 between the levels of
education
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. The percentage of
people
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 with
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university
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a university
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education
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 was up to 76% in the younger three
age
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 groups compared to only 50% in those ages 50 to 75 and just 25% in those over 75.
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 trend was reversed in those with no
qualifications
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 (9% in younger
people
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 rising to 72% in the oldest
age
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 group). The figure for those with school
education
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 was relatively constant at around 20% but was as low as 3% in the over 75's. The proportion of men and women in each level of
education
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 was around one third with only a
slightly
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 difference of 3% in
university
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 graduates
as well as
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 those who didn’t have educational
qualifications
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, education, university, qualifications, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage distribution
  • educational levels
  • qualifications
  • higher education
  • school level qualifications
  • no qualifications
  • proportions
  • notable trends
  • outliers
  • age demographics
  • economic conditions
  • social policies
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