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the charts below give information about levels of education in glasgow, a city in scotland, in 2010

the charts below give information about levels of education in glasgow, a city in scotland, in 2010
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The bar chart and pie charts illustrate the percentage of
people
 in Glasgow having three levels of
education
 (
university
, school and those with no
qualifications
) in 2010. Information is divided into five
age
 groups in the bar chart and by gender in the pie charts.
Overall
, the majority of
people
 with
university
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education
 were in younger
age
 groups,
while
 in the oldest
age
group
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 most
people
 did not have any
qualifications
. The proportions of men and women were similar and showed
ttle
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little
different
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 between the levels of
education
. The percentage of
people
 with
university
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education
 was up to 76% in the younger three
age
 groups compared to only 50% in those ages 50 to 75 and just 25% in those over 75.
This
 trend was reversed in those with no
qualifications
 (9% in younger
people
 rising to 72% in the oldest
age
 group). The figure for those with school
education
 was relatively constant at around 20% but was as low as 3% in the over 75's. The proportion of men and women in each level of
education
 was around one third with only a
slightly
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 difference of 3% in
university
 graduates
as well as
 those who didn’t have educational
qualifications
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, education, university, qualifications, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage distribution
  • educational levels
  • qualifications
  • higher education
  • school level qualifications
  • no qualifications
  • proportions
  • notable trends
  • outliers
  • age demographics
  • economic conditions
  • social policies
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