The use of electronic has a negative effect on personal relationships between people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The revelation of
technology
have
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brought many
benifits
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benefits
for mankind, but it had given some
affect
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on human life,
specilly
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especially
specially
on
the
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social life. the
benifit
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benefit
benefits
of
technology
are uncountable,but the
beggest
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are
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communecation
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communication
, huge impact
from
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technology
had changed
the
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communication ways and it became digital
insted
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instead
of physical,
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phsycologicly
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phycological
human nature had changed.
frenship
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friendship
, love, etc had
recived
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received
an impact from
technology
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electronic devices
  • personal relationships
  • communication
  • social skills
  • face-to-face interaction
  • isolation
  • emotional connection
  • maintain friendships
  • screen time
  • technology addiction
  • social media
  • virtual communication
  • benefits
  • drawbacks
  • interpersonal skills
  • disconnect
  • digital world
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