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Using a mobile phone to answer the work and personal calls at any time or 7 days a week. Positive/negative development?

Using a mobile phone to answer the work and personal calls at any time or 7 days a week. Positive/negative development?
It
is believe
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 that using a
cell
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phone
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 to
answer
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the
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apply
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work
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 and personal calls at any
time
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 or 7 days a week.
While
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 agree using a cellular
phone
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 to
answer
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the
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job and personal calls at any
time
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 or 7 days a week,
i
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 suppose it
have
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 both advantages and disadvantages. On the one hand, it is true that using a mobile
phone
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 to
answer
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the
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work
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 and personal calls at any
time
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 is extremely helpful. Because with
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cell
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a cell
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phone
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, we can handle urgent situations anytime and anywhere,
that
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 will help us not to miss anything. Another advantageous
effects
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 is
cell
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phone
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 allow quick and easy communication with
their
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families and friends, despite the geographical location.
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, using a mobile
phone
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 to
answer
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the
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work
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 and personal calls at
anytime
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 is have
also
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many
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 disadvantages.Because
for example
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 when we go out, text messages or calls about
work
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 will disturb us, making us no longer comfortable on our trip.Since
then
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,
if
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after a long
time
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, our physical or mental health will be reduced and worse, we may suffer from stress disease. In conclusion,
i
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 agree using a
cell
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phone
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 to
answer
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the
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apply
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work
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 and personal calls at
anytime
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any time
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 is very
posinative
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positive
, but
i
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 presume that it
also
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 has negative sides.

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