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The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar graph illustrates the amount of money
spend
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spent
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 on client items (cars, computers, boots, perfume, cameras)
by
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in
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France
 and the
UK
. The data
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was given
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given
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are given
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 in thousands
pounds
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of pounds
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 sterling in 2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the number of spending
for
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on
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 cars, books and cameras for the
UK
 was higher than the same figure for
France
.
However
, the quantity of spend
for
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on
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camputers
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computers
 and perfume in
France
 was bigger than the same indication for the
UK
. The
number of
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apply
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amount of money spend
for
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on
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car
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cars
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 in
France
 (400) was lower by about 60 as high as
the
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in the
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UK
one
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apply
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.
This
 figure for
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the consumer
a consumer
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consumer
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consumers
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 in
France
 for books (300) was more considerable than expenditure in the
UK
.
Following
this
, a 200 gap was the case in the figures for higher expending in the
UK
 and
France
 (around 150). The amount of
expending
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expenses
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 for
camputers
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computers
 in the
UK
 (approximately 250) was a little lower by about 10 than the same figure for
France
.
Furthermore
, the quantity of spending money
for
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on
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 perfume
for
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in
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 the
UK
 was nearly as high as the same index for
France
 (200).
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words france, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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