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Many people believe that lecture halls have been replaced by online learning. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The trend of having instruction online has been very significant and has been substituted with face-to-face interaction in the classroom as viewed by several schools of thought and in my opinion, I do agree with the motion put across. I shall elucidate my viewpoints in the forthcoming paragraphs.
Firstly
, there has been a replacement for the way
people
 study by the use of the net.
This
 has been subjected to numerous reasons and one of these is the conditions in which one finds himself or herself . When the nation is affected by the outbreak of a pandemic ,there would be a partial shutdown in the interaction made between
people
 in order to curtail the circumstance and thereby learning in class would be of no use rather there would be a switch to other means of studies with social media being a good medium to transcend information to students. A recent review is a report on the outbreak of Coronavirus which
lead
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 to a lockdown. Lectures were interrupted and students had to study using the online method.
Furthermore
, a sizeable number of
people
 believe lecturing online is seen to be far more modern and convenient and
this
 has made many training institutions focus on the e-learning pathway and replace
this
 with the interpersonal interaction between the tutor and the students which has been classified as an outmoded way of learning. Lectures can go on albeit the tutor is not present.
For example
,
people
 offering a course in Zoology at the
university
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University
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 of Lancaster have lectures via Zoom most of the time. Conclusively, convenience and modernisation summing up with certain factors have
made
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apply
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substitution
of
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apply
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online studies with face-to-face learning.
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coherence and cohesion
Work on improving the logical structure of your essay to ensure that ideas are presented in a coherent and cohesive manner. Ensure that your introduction and conclusion are strong and clear, and that your main points are well-supported throughout the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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