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In some countries, owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people. why might this be the case? Do you think this is positive or negative situation?

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There are several ways to accommodate which are different based on an individual’s affordability. In some cases,
people
 attempted to own a house as a property
instead
 of renting which they couldn’t save money for a long time.
However
, to say that home ownership is one of the main priorities for everyone may be a rather simplistic view.
To begin
 with, many individuals seek to owe permanent residents whereby they can save their incomes for other purposes and
also
, they shouldn’t be worried about rising rent prices and eviction.
Furthermore
, the tenants mostly have to abide landlord’s regulations and, they couldn’t change their residence suitable for their needs.
Although
, there are some struggles that
people
 have to undergo with them to achieve their ownership. For instants, in many countries,
people
 take loans from banks some of them have heavy
endeavors
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 to return.
In addition
, in several European countries, the taxations for a house are too much than rather the rental price. It's apart from other costs of owning a home like repairments and renovations. Admittedly, it is true that the process of resident ownership could make a wide range of suffering to
people
 but it must be considered that its advantages are outweighed. I strongly believe that having a home for their own could bring peace of mind, confidence, and, happiness.
Moreover
, when you get your place, you are free to change it whether you wish and there are no limits. My personal experience is an example,
while
 I lived in Tehran with my sister in the small apartment where my brother was its owner, we were free to make any changes. We painted the walls and even the roofs because they were dirty, redecorated the shoe's place a made it wider.
Hence
, having personal accommodation gives you a sense of satisfaction.
Overall
, it depends on personal interest, priorities, and affordability to have a resident for themselves or rent it.
However
, renting a house is a short-term answer to vital needs and
people
 couldn’t rely on it for a long perspective.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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