The diagram shows how chocolate is produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparions where relevant
The diagram illustrates the way in which chocolate is manufactured.
Overall
, the process consists form ten steps, beginning with locating the cacao trees which can be found in South America, Africa and Indonesia and ending up with liquid chocolate produced by manufacturers.
First of all, after locating the cacao trees where ripe red pods are growing, the pods are harvested and sliced with a machete to extract white cocoa beans
. Then
, received beans
are lied in leaves to launch the fermentation process. Next,
they are spread in sun to dry all the moisture. The fifth step will be to put the beans
in large sacks, weigh them and prepare them for transportation.
In the following steps, packs travel to a factory by train or lorry. After that, granules are roasted at the temperature of 350 degrees of Celsius. Subsequently
, they are crushed to remove and separate the outer shell. Finally
, crushed beans
undergo an inner part press, where they melt producing liquid chocolate.Submitted by vlad220904 on
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