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In some countries, the difference in age between parents and children nowadays is greater than in the past is this a positive or a negative development

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In recent times, people are deciding to become
parents
 later on in life.
Therefore
, in some countries, the
age
 difference is greater than it was in the past. Some people may believe that
this
 happened
due to
 an increase in life expectancy. I firmly believe that a higher
age
 gap between
parents
 and kids is a positive development because older
parents
 can provide higher financial and emotional stability than younger adults. In
this
 context,
this
 essay will address why the boons outweigh the drawbacks of having a more mature mother and father and will include relevant examples to support
this
 position. A youth does not have the same income as an older person,
hence
 they have less ability to provide an elevated quality for their children's upbringing and education.
Furthermore
, because of the higher income more mature
parents
 can spend more time with their children than younger fathers and mothers. Not money nor time are the only problems with young parenting,
nevertheless
, the lack of experience can future affect negatively impact the child’s behaviour.
For instance
, they will not know how to address certain misbehaviours, and the lack of excessive punishment can mentality impact
this
 child’s life. In
this
 framework,
due to
 the same reason, children with elder
parents
 are more prepared to face challenges because the knowledge was passed to them. The growth in knowledge because of experience is something that perhaps, younger adults lack.
On the other hand
, infants that are raised by other
parents
 can lose their early which can affect their memories and their bond with their father and mother.
Moreover
, a higher
age
 gap can lead to a clash of generations and a tendency for more frequent arguments. For these reasons, I believe
that is
 a certain
age
 to conceive a baby which is around the late twenties until the middle thirties. Becoming
parents
 around
this
age
 will not have the pitfalls of too old parenting or young parenting, and they will
also
 be able to enjoy and spend a reasonable amount of time with their infants. In conclusion, I believe that older parenting is more beneficial for both parties, infants and adults, than young parenting.
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