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Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any lifetime experiences. Which do you consider to be the major influence?

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Some
studies
 want to demonstrate that the
characteristics
 which every
person
 was born with are more important than experiences made in
lifetime
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 for the personality of a
person
. These
studies
 appear to contradict the common experience and conclusions of many other
studies
 known. It is a truth that every
person
 born with particular
characteristics
 because of the genetics characters which are the consequence of the cross between mother and father but these
characteristics
 are only the base It is true that every
person
 is born with particular
characteristics
due to
 genetic
characteristics
 are the consequence of the crossing between mother and father but these
characteristics
 are only the basis on which the character of that
person
 will be formed over the years. Unlike the
studies
 mentioned at the outset, the most common and accepted
studies
 dealing with
this
 topic present vastly different theories on what things influence the formation of a
person
's character. The first and most important thing that influences a
person
's growth is the family into which he was born.
For example
, an abusive family is more likely to grow up to be
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abusive
person
.
On the other hand
,
also
 growing up in a degraded social context generally leads people not to respect the rules and other people.
Instead
, growing up in a peaceful family and in a happy society will bring out, generally, the best sides of a
person
's character. In conclusion, it’s possible to say that human
characteristics
 depend on many causes but,
according to
 me, the most important are lifetime experiences.
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