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In some countries, the difference in age between parents and children nowadays is greater than in the past. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Today people on average
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 longer than in the past to have their first baby.
As a result
, the
age
 gap between generations is widening. Despite certain drawbacks, I believe that
this
 is primarily a positive development that can benefit both
parents
 and their
children
.
Parents
 who choose to have
children
 in their late twenties or early thirties are better prepared to support their families financially. Unlike previous generations, who often became
parents
 in their early twenties or even as teens, today’s
parents
 have time to complete their education and develop professional skills, making them more likely to earn a higher income to support their
children
’s upbringing and future education. Assuming parental responsibilities at a more mature
age
also
 means that adults have time to accumulate the greater life experience required to become good
parents
. They better know how to communicate with others and how to control their emotions and
therefore
 can become more patient and understanding
parents
.
Children
also
 benefit psychologically from growing up in more stable families. Proponents of earlier parenthood usually claim that when the
age
 gap between
parents
 and
children
 is too wide, people may not see their grandchildren grow up,
children
 may be forced to look after their elderly
parents
 from an early
age
, and families may lack understanding
due to
 the generation gap.
Although
 these arguments have their merits, I believe that these problems are more pronounced for the minority of couples who have their
children
 in their forties or fifties, and society in general benefits from people having
children
 at a more mature
age
.
To conclude
, the social trend of having
children
 later will likely continue in most countries.
Although
 it increases certain risks, I still see
this
 as a predominantly positive development because more mature and financially secure
parents
 can better support their growing
children
, giving them more time and attention and better opportunities.
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