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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
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The bar chart illustrates the average percentages of the sectors in which families used to make expenditures in 1968 and in 2018.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that the major part of the weekly income was addressed to food in 1968,
in contrast
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 in 2018 the costs were mainly in four different sectors.
To begin
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, the costs of housing, transport and leisure became far higher in the balance of a family between 1968 and 2018.
For instance
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, house doubled her percentage over the time frame,
while
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 leisure rose dramatically by approximately 14 per cent.
However
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, there were significant decreases in some voices of expenditures. Certainly, the most relevant was on food which dropped from 35 per cent in 1968 to just over 15 in 2018.
Moreover
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 personal goods and clothing showed a similar trend falling by nearly half.

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