The maps bellow show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now , and plans for its development.

The maps bellow show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now , and plans for its development.
The maps illustrate
a
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the
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current Islip town
centre
and how it will look in future after some changes.
Overall
,
it is clear that
a number of major modifications are going to be in the Islip town
centre
. These include constructing
dual
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carriageway, car
park
, shopping
centre
and other supporting facilities . At present , the main
road
is situated between shops . The
park
is connected to the main
road
.
Countryside
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is on the north
side
of
main
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the main
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road
,
while
the south
side
has two housing . In the second map , it can be seen that in future, there are
planned
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plans
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to develop the dual carriageway around the bus station, car
park
and so on.
Main
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The main
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road
is to be used for only pedestrians and the north
side
of it will construct the bus station, shopping
centre
, car
park
and housing. The shops ,
park
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parks
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and schools will remain the same . The housing will relocate on the left
side
of the shops ,
while
the
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on the
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right
side
the new housing will build across the
park
. Another housing will locate outside the dual carriageway.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, park, road, side with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • residential
  • commercial
  • pedestrianization
  • relocation
  • sustainability
  • urban planning
  • land use
  • green spaces
  • civic amenities
  • public transport options
  • commute
  • zoning
  • traffic congestion
  • redevelopment
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