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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this happen? What can government dot to help reduce the amount of litter?

#rubbish #happen #government #dot #amount #litter
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 issue because of increase littering rate. In
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 I will outline what initiative
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 government done to solve
this
 current issue and the possible reason for littering. The littering problem has
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on
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not only
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 the environment but
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 animals and the air that
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breath
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. Despite that fact
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 some people choose litter
instead
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 it in right place. And that happened because usually people do not feel personally responsible
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for their convenience.
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, the demand from industry
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 to
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the
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 number of factories to satisfy the demand which
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 the rubbish as result. The
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 role to reduce the rate
highly
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 important and could be done through the following recommendation.
Firstly
, there should
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 recycle
bin
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 available to
public
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the public
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.
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, in Japan there waste
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 after 300m more accessible
bin
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the
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more people will
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 the stop littering because they find
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 to hold the trash until they find
bin
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. Another method is
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young
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 generation about littering and
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has
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.
Finally
, regulation for factories and
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 should be enforced through steeper fins in order to take it seriously. In conclusion,
government
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 has
huge
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 duty to reduce the rubbish rate through different
initiative
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initiatives
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 like education, policy and
provide
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 more
recycle
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bin
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bins
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.
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