Smoking tobacco is becoming increasingly popular among young people with potentially serious effects on their health. Explain some reasons for this problem and suggest some possible solution.

In recent years, cigarette consumption in adolescents has grown,
consequently
increasing the chances of developing health-related issues.
This
essay will be reviewing some possible sources of
this
problem
as well as
methods to prevent it. One possible reason for
this
occurrence is that smoking is highly prominent in several aspects of media,
such
as the Internet, films and social media. Generally, it is portrayed in a likeable matter, with some even saying it is notably glorified.
As a result
of
this
,
children
often pick up
this
habit
out of the notion that it is interesting and will possibly result in enthusiastic comments from peers.
Furthermore
, when it comes to peers, often it is close relatives and friends that introduce smoking to each other. A major percentage of adults consume tobacco,
thus
children
often are exposed to
this
habit
at a very young age by caretakers. As they are impressionable and inquisitive about their surroundings, they are likely to mimic the behaviour.
For example
, surveys conducted by the University of Colorado in local secondary educational institutions in 2009 suggested that
children
with parents that were heavy smokers were inclined by more than 65% to develop smoking as a
habit
. Parents should be more cautious when indulging in
such
activities around adolescents as one way to prevent
this
issue from arising.
Additionally
, not only should
children
be discouraged by guardians to not partake, but
also
be appropriately lectured on the manner. Another way to possibly counteract smoking in adolescents is to encourage and
further
apply more lectures on the topic in educational institutions.
Although
there exist already a large number of lessons opposing
this
topic, there is not enough variety and a suitable approach.
This
subject should adequately and inclusively be brought up which will lead to more awareness and knowledge
on
Change preposition
of
show examples
the detrimental effects of tobacco consumption.
As a result
of
this
, fewer pupils will be acknowledging it as a sociable
habit
or exciting hobby and rather as an unnecessary addiction.
To conclude
, the growth of tobacco use among younger people is
due to
inappropriate exposure, usually presented as acceptable and even favourable.
However
,
this
has a majorly adverse effect on health which can only be combated by raising awareness and discouragement both in media and by the people that surround us, especially parents and educators.
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