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people in many countries consider the influence of role models on young generation's lives to be important. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, we are living in an open world where everyone has access to other's people lives through different platforms like social media;
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, there are some people influencing youngsters more than others and we can consider them "role models",
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 some people argue
this
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 influence is important on youth's lives, others think it is not, but is it really important?
This
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 essay will discuss
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 phenomenon, considering that I totally agree with the first opinion.
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, it goes without saying that, the young generation is easily affected by external factors,
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 is the nature of
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 age;
consequently
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, having a successful role model is important in order to lead them in the right direction.
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, if we ask any famous and successful person about his mentor, he should mention someone because it is necessary to have one to lead by example.
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, most youngsters do not know their own capabilities and ignore what they can do;
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, finding someone who can support them in exploring themselves and emphasise their strong points
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 helping them improve their weak points, is a necessary matter.
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, most of the great athletes like the boxer "Muhammed Ali" mentioned having a great trainer represented halfway of their success.
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,
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 the aforementioned reasons, we may safely conclude that having a role model is an essential matter to ensure the right guidance for your children, but
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 we need to watch closely who affecting them to make sure it is the right person to be followed.

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