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Governments prohibiting underage children from getting full-time jobs in certain countries. Do you agree or disagree?

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I strongly agree with the idea of governments not allowing underage
children
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 from working in a full-time
job
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. Because the
child
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 must be doing and learning so many things to build his future
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 of just working all day.
Firstly
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, some countries prevent underage
children
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 to
work
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 for a specific reason
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 as: they see that studying or going to school has the priority first to be successful in life and to do big achievements.
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, so many underage teens or
children
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work
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 all day to earn money but leaving school for
work
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 isn't the right choice at their age.
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, if the
child
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 works from a young age he won't be as experienced as adults to deal with a whole variety of people during
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.
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 working may help the
child
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 be more independent and learn how to deal with things in a right way.
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, of course by preventing these
children
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 from working in some countries can be right.
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: they will be able to study and end up in a better and higher place
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 of just working the same
job
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 for a long term without gaining any benefits for their future career.
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, underage
children
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 who
work
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 in a full-time
job
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 will end up not attending school because of the lack of time. In conclusion, some countries support
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 idea for the sake of
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 to be able to focus more on his future
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, to have enough time to study and learn a lot of new skills than just working in a full-time
job
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.
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