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the tables below give information about the world population and distribution in 1950 and 2000, with an estimate of the situation in 2050. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the tables below give information about the world population and distribution in 1950 and 2000, with an estimate of the situation in 2050. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The tables under
shows
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 data about the
earth
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 nation and dispersion from 1950 to 2000, with an approx of the condition until 2050. Briefly the data by choosing and
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 the foundation features and make confrontations where
relationship
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world
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 population will
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increas
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 surge, so many areas provide that information. Asia countries ever have
been
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many humans because that area involves the most humans of states
Also
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 are
seing
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seeing
 Asia region main area in
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 area is
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 Africa
which
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where
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 those people have low educational
level
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situation
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a situation
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to impact
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inhabitants
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the inhabitants
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 of
world
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. On the one
hand
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 world population
hade
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had
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 been 2.5
billions
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 in 1950, but there was
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significantly
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 increase since 2000
in
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which
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this
number
 is 6
billions
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.
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contrast
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 the researchers
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investigated
this
sitiation
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situation
 and
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populations
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population
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 used to be 9
billions
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billion
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 in 2050.
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hand
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 another research gives information about which countries have
portion
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at
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 the situation. Africa was rated to 9
percent
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 in 1950 that
number
 gradually rapid so 2000 and 2050 13%,
20
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and 20
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% respectively. Asia
regian
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region
 there was big percentage at the table,
while
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this
number
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 56% but next decade a gradual climb to 60% ,
latter
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 a sudden decrease to 59%.
Although
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significantly
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number
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at
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the table, in 1950
percentage
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 had been 22%, another time 12%,
7
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and 7
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% respectively.
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Latin America, North America and
Ocenia
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Oceania
 have
smallest
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the smallest
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 portion
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of avarage
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avarage
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average
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countries
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country
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 will be
same
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 rate.
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