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What are the advantages and disadvantages of using CCTV cameras to fight crime?

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In order to curb the rate of
crime
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, the installation of
CCTV
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 cameras is becoming increasingly common. In my opinion, even though there are several possible disadvantages to
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 trend, its benefits are far outweighing the drawbacks. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I will discuss both of these views. On the
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 hand, installing
CCTV
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 is very beneficial for law enforcement to gain evidence from a suspect of a
crime
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. To incarcerate a suspect of a
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,
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 of the difficult tasks that police must do is to prove that someone is guilty because
one
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 can easily make an alibi and refuse the allegation towards him or her. Giving evidence is
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 of the ways to prove the guilt of a suspect of a
crime
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, and using
CCTV
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 is well known as
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 of the reliable sources that law enforcement can rely on.
CCTV
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 can record and depict the
crime
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 scene which can support police to put someone in jail.
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, it can deter
crime
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 by making people aware that they are being monitored.
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,
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 of the drawbacks of security equipment is that it could emerge with trust issues among the
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 of a neighbourhood.
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 to that,
CCTV
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 is not yet widely adopted worldwide. In some rural areas in Indonesia
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, where the society is bonded with trust in each other, if there is a household that installs
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, it could lead the neighbourhood to feel offended because
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 could be translated as distrust to the people in the community. Conclusively,
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 surveillance system using
CCTV
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 sometimes is not reliable in all circumstances and locations. In conclusion, there are some drawbacks to installing
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, especially in rural areas. The advantages that
CCTV
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 could provide to reduce the
crime
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 rate, especially in urban areas are stronger than the disadvantages.
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Improve the organization of ideas in each paragraph to enhance coherence and cohesion. Ensure that each paragraph maintains a clear focus on the main idea and supports it effectively. Use linking words and transition phrases to create smoother connections between sentences and paragraphs.
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Ensure that all aspects of the task are addressed fully. Provide a more balanced discussion of the advantages and disadvantages of using CCTV cameras, and use examples to support each point. Make sure to address the specific requirements of the task to achieve a higher score.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Deterrent
  • CCTV (Closed-Circuit Television)
  • Evidence
  • Constant surveillance
  • Monitor
  • Privacy
  • Vandalism
  • Malfunction
  • Blackmail
  • Voyeurism
  • Surveillance
  • Maintenance
  • Conviction
  • Authorities
  • Public safety
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