Some people hold that we should spend a large amount of time and money on the protection of wild animals. Some people argue that they should be spent on human populations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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some
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envisage that it is better
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much cash and
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on preserving wild animals, others believe that human populations are more pivotal. I agree that it is wiser for
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to allocate their
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and
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to human beings because of some reasons.
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, there are many social problems in society that must be overcome. In
this
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modern era, many folks in certain areas still suffer from poverty, famine and water crisis. public should pay attention to those by donating their capital to charity organizations or participating in social events to
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positive effects on them.
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, in Africa, many children deal with hunger which can lead them to have many health problems
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as diarrhoea, stunting, and even death.
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, if
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circumstance
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continues, a particular community will lose their young generation from
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to
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.
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,
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should give their
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and
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to
education
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.
People
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with better literacy might gain the best quality of life. By giving
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to teach some uneducated
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, society can avoid them suffering from stupidness.
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, the government can provide many scholarships for those who cannot afford to reach higher
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because of a lack of
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.
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, when
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have a higher
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, it might
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for them to get a better job.
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, they can meet their needs and not be a burden to the country.
To sum up
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,
although
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protecting wild animals is essential for natural life, it is far more significant for
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to spend their
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on human beings because it can solve many serious problems and increase higher
education
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on human populations.
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coherence and cohesion
In the introduction, clearly state your position on the given topic and give a brief overview of the reasons you will discuss in the body paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
Support your arguments with more specific examples and elaborate on how allocating resources to human populations can solve the social problems mentioned.
coherence and cohesion
Include a stronger conclusion that summarizes your main points and restates your position on the topic.
task response
Make sure to address all parts of the prompt and provide a more balanced discussion of both sides of the argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • endangered species
  • ecological balance
  • habitat destruction
  • climate change
  • intervention
  • ethical responsibility
  • natural heritage
  • pressing need
  • poverty
  • health crises
  • education
  • eco-tourism
  • sustainable agriculture
  • awareness
  • conservation efforts
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