the chart below shows the proportion of british students at one university in england

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who spoke other

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at one particular university in 2000 and 2010.during these years most students

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a tendency to speak other

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in 2000 and 2010 who could not speak another

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language were 20% and 10% respectively.

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,the proportion of students who were able to speak two other

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in 2000 has slightly increased in 2010.

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in their pattern.

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has remained in 10

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in 2 decades.Meanwhile

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language had marginally decreased from 15% in 2000 to 10%

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by the figure is that,the percentage of

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in the university who

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as a second language was

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portion during these years with 30% in 2000 and 35% in 2010

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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156 words

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the chart below shows the proportion of british students at one university in england

Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree.

Labor-saving devices such as dishwashers and communication tools such as computers are supposed to make our lives easier. However, some people argue that these devices one make them more difficult. Does modern technology reduce or increase stress?

Your workplace does not have a parking area for cars, and it is causing some problems. Write a letter to your manager and include the following: – Describe the problems it has caused. – Explain what benefits a parking area would bring to the company. – Suggest a solution.

Some people suggest that bringing up children by thw whole family includimg uncles, aunts and grandparents is better, rather than only by parents. To what extend are you agree or disagree?

Some peole believe that culture will be ruined if it is used to earn tourism revenue, but others consider that tourism is the only way of protecting culture. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.