the chart below shows the proportion of british students at one university in england
A glance at the two charts provided reveals the percentage of
british
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British
student
who spoke other Fix the agreement mistake
students
languages
apart from english
at one particular university in 2000 and 2010.during these years most students Change the capitalization
English
has
a tendency to speak other Change the verb form
have
languages
.
According to
the charts,the percentage of student
in 2000 and 2010 who could not speak another Fix the agreement mistake
students
further
language were 20% and 10% respectively.In addition
,the proportion of students who were able to speak two other languages
and one another languages
in 2000 has slightly increased in 2010.Fix the agreement mistake
language
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groups have seenChange preposition
Both
5
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a 5
percent
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per cent
grow
in their pattern.
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student
who spoke GermanyAdd an article
a student
the student
,
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apply
also
has remained in 10 percent
in 2 decades.Meanwhile Change the spelling
per cent
french
language had marginally decreased from 15% in 2000 to 10% Correct article usage
the french
in2010
.Another Correct your spelling
in 2010
further
point that highlighted
by the figure is that,the percentage of Add a missing verb
is highlighted
student
in the university who Fix the agreement mistake
students
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choose
choosed
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chose
spanish
as a second language was Change the capitalization
Spanish
biggest
portion during these years with 30% in 2000 and 35% in 2010Change the article
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