Some people think that only the goverment can make significant changes in society while others think that individuals can have a lot of influence. What is your opinion?

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Nowadays, it is commonly believed that only the

government

can make global changes in society,

while

some people think that each person can make a huge impact

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our world. Personally, I would say that rules written by the

government

are more valuable than actions made by individuals.

This

essay will discuss both of these thoughts and include some examples. On the one hand, the

government

creates laws to make people's lives better. Most of the laws were aimed to increase the wealth and level of happiness of each resident in a country.

Furthermore

, the

government

is a controlling institution which able to predict and tackle problems in society.

For instance

, the New Zealand

government

published a law that forbids selling cigarettes to customers who were born after 2013.

This

decision completely change

situation

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the situation

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with young smokers and whole health issues caused by cigarettes.

On the other hand

, individuals think only about their own profit and sometimes forget about others.

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number of people are following celebrities and don't have personal opinions about some aspects of life and just replicate

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the behavior

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behavior

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and civil position of

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their favorite

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favorite

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influencers.

For example

, Elon Musk`s fan base has wrong imaginations about

history

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the history

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and even

Ukrainian-Russian

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the Ukrainian-Russian

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war because of

incorrect

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the incorrect

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political views of

well-known

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the well-known

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and rich individual Elon Musk.

To sum up

, I would say that I completely share the opinion that governments make more influence than a single person.

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, in my

opinion

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acts made by the

government

are more useful and were made with good intentions.

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