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Some people think that only the goverment can make significant changes in society while others think that individuals can have a lot of influence. What is your opinion?

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Nowadays, it is commonly believed that only the
government
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 can make global changes in society,
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 some people think that each person can make a huge impact
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 our world. Personally, I would say that rules written by the
government
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 are more valuable than actions made by individuals.
This
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 essay will discuss both of these thoughts and include some examples. On the one hand, the
government
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 creates laws to make people's lives better. Most of the laws were aimed to increase the wealth and level of happiness of each resident in a country.
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, the
government
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 is a controlling institution which able to predict and tackle problems in society.
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, the New Zealand
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 published a law that forbids selling cigarettes to customers who were born after 2013.
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 with young smokers and whole health issues caused by cigarettes.
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, individuals think only about their own profit and sometimes forget about others.
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 number of people are following celebrities and don't have personal opinions about some aspects of life and just replicate
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the behavior
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behavior
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behaviour
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 and civil position of
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their favorite
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favorite
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favourite
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 influencers.
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, Elon Musk`s fan base has wrong imaginations about
history
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the history
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 and even
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the Ukrainian-Russian
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 war because of
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the incorrect
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 political views of
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 and rich individual Elon Musk.
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, I would say that I completely share the opinion that governments make more influence than a single person.
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, in my
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 acts made by the
government
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 are more useful and were made with good intentions.
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