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The bar chart shows the share of poverty of the rural areas in the years 1993 and 2002. The pie chart shows the rural area share and the urban area share of poverty in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the share of poverty of the rural areas in the years 1993 and 2002. The pie chart shows the rural area share and the urban area share of poverty in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two charts depict
rural
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the rural
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share
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 of
poverty
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 during the decade-long period 1993-2002, and the comparative spread in rural vis-à-vis urban areas, specifically in the terminal year 2002. As per the pie chart,
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 rural areas
share
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 76% of
poverty
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, the urban
share
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 is only 24%. That means the rural populace is thrice as likely to be poor as
urban
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the urban
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 population.
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 huge gap is,
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, not evenly spread across major regions of the world, as shown by the bar graph. In three major regions of the world, namely
Middle
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the Middle
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 East & North Africa, South Asia and sub-Saharan Africa, there is a marginal reduction in
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the rural
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 of
poverty
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 during
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 10-year period.
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, there is a substantial increase in
poverty
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 during
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 period in Europe and Central Asia. There is little change in East Asia & Pacific, where rural
poverty
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 has a whopping 90%
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. An
honorable
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 exception is North America & Caribbean, where the rural
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 was always low but has
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 gone down to just 40%.

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