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The line graph illustrates the number of magazine sales by a publisher in 4 European countries between 1999 and 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the number of magazine sales by a publisher in 4 European countries between 1999 and 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.
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The graph compares statistics of sold newspapers in
France
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, Holland,
Belgium
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 and Germany from 1999 to 2002.
It is clear that
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sales
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 of magazines in Germany were the most profitable in 1999
,
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 when approximately 4,5
million
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of
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Euros were gained.
However
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, the statistics in
this
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 country showed a downward trend and hit the lowest point in 2002 (just under 3 000 000). The number of newspapers sold in Holland fluctuated from 3
million
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 in 1999 to about 3,3
million
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 in 2002 and
then
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 the figure remained stable at the level of 3
million
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of
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Euros per year from 2001 to 2002. Probing
further
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, there were two positive tendencies in
sales
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 of magazines in
France
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 and
Belgium
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. Both countries showed an upward trend.
Sales
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 in
France
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 increased steadily from around 4
million
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 to 5
million
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of
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Euros.
Furthermore
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, The number of sold newspapers in
Belgium
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 grew significantly from approximately 2
million
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 in 1999 and reached a peak in 2002.
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, it could be seen that
sales
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 in
Belgium
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 and
France
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 increased during the period,
while
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sales
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 in Germany plummeted. Statistics in Holland fluctuated.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words france, belgium, sales, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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