the chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

the chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
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The bar chart gives information about the percentage of families’ salary spending during a week in a society in 1968 and 2018. It is important to note that in 1968 people spent most of their income buying food. In 1968 the proportion of buying food stood at 35% in comparison, with fuel and power was just above 5% in the same
moreover
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it is noticeable that household
goods
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, personal
goods
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and transport stood at just under 10%
in contrast
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with housing and clothing and footwear that were at 10% it shows that communities allocated their weekly money on food and after that clothing and footwear and housing ware the first stuff that they bought.
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in 2018, the folk spent their income average on leisure activities approximately 22%
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fuel and power were just under 5%
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personal
goods
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had the same rates as fuel and power at the same time.
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, housing was the second activity that people paid for it that was just under 20% and at the
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but not least it is important to say that the household
goods
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rate did not change in both these years.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words goods with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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