the graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

the graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
The graph shows information about the
number
of stores that are shut down and
also
the
number
of shops that opened in a country between 2011 and 2018.
Moreover
, it is important to note that
number
of stores that started their job in 2011 which were under closing in 2018 had a higher
number
. In 2011 the group of shops who started their job was just above 6000 experienced dramatically decrease to 6000 and
then
increased significantly.
However
, in comparison with the following two years that it fell sharply and nearly hit 0 in 2015, but in the next year the proportion of openings rocketed to just above 5000.
Also
, they remain in the same
number
for next years.
Likewise
, the closure
number
that stood at approximately 7000 in 2011 faced a sharp drop to 4000 in 2012 and
then
moved in the opposite way to just above 5000. In the next year, it decreased again to 4000 and after that onward
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