Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.

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One of the most controversial issues around the world is

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economic

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economy

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in each country.Meanwhile many

governments

believe advancement in

economic

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economics

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is the most important

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of each

countries

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.But some opponents think there are many factors that are as important as

economic

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economics

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.I partially agree with both groups and I will explain more in detail with some examples. On the one hand,

governments

are wondering to improve the economical condition and there

are

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stiff competition between authorities in

countries

around the world to

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success in

this

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.The reason is that

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advancement

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advancements

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economic

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economics

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help

governments

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make

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them strong.

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gain

money and spend it in

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part

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parts

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countries

they can cope with poverty and have

healthy

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society

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such

as the USA,Canada and

United

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kingdom could

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in many areas

beacuse

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because

they are economically strong.

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government

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the government

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have

also

numerous responsibilities toward

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citizens.They

also

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have

power

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to legislate rules or allocate money to

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part

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community

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the community

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to enhance the quality of

peoples

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life or

satisfaction

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the satisfaction

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of people in all

part

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parts

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of their life.

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one

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of the most important

part

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countries

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that

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the governmet

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governmet

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government

governments

should pay enough attention to it because

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and strong

society

consist

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healthy

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of healthy

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people and without

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society

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we can not

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achieve

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.Another

further

example is education.each

society

who

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that

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consider

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education can

gain

many

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profit

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, not only in innovation and science but

also

in economics.

To sum up

governments

duties should not be taken lightly in

society

and I believe just with attention

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all aspects

eqully

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equally

we can

gain

the desired result

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