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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.

#governments #progress #people #country
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One of the most controversial issues around the world is
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the economic
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economic
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economy
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 in each country.Meanwhile many
governments
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 believe advancement in
economic
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economics
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 is the most important
parts
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part
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 of each
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countries
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country
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.But some opponents think there are many factors that are as important as
economic
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economics
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.I partially agree with both groups and I will explain more in detail with some examples. On the one hand,
governments
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 are wondering to improve the economical condition and there
are
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 stiff competition between authorities in
countries
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 around the world to
gain
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 success in
this
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issues
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.The reason is that
,
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apply
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advancement
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advancements
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 in
economic
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economics
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 help
governments
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 to be more powerful and
make
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makes
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 them strong.
In addition
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,just with
gain
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 money and spend it in
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a different
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part
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parts
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 of
countries
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 they can cope with poverty and have
healthy
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a healthy
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society
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.
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,most of the developed and rich
countries
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such
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 as the USA,Canada and
United
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the United
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 kingdom could
developed
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be developed
develop
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 in many areas
beacuse
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because
 they are economically strong.
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,
government
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the government
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 have
also
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 numerous responsibilities toward
their
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its
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 citizens.They
also
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,
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have
power
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the power
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 to legislate rules or allocate money to
different
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a different
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part
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parts
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 of
community
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the community
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 to enhance the quality of
peoples
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people's
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 life or
satisfaction
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the satisfaction
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 of people in all
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part
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parts
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 of their life.
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,health is
on
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one
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 of the most important
part
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 of each
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countries
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country
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 that
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the governmet
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governmet
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government
governments
 should pay enough attention to it because
healthy
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a healthy
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 and strong
society
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consist
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,
healthy
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of healthy
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 people and without
healthy
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a healthy
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society
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,society
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 we can not
be
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be achieved
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achieve
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.Another
further
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 example is education.each
society
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who
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that
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consider
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considers
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to
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education can
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many
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profit
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profits
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, not only in innovation and science but
also
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 in economics.
To sum up
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,
governments
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 duties should not be taken lightly in
society
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 and I believe just with attention
in
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to
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 all aspects
eqully
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equally
 we can
gain
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 the desired result
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