universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what eztent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people say that
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number
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of male and female
students
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should attend the
class
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. I completely disagree with
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idea. There are two main reasons which are associated with personal desire and lack of
orentation
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orientation
. First of all, I completely believe that
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one
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has their own goals. In simple terms, most
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the
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girls naturally want to study
as
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teaching, nursing or acting. We can clearly see that there are a small
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of female mechanical engineering or plumber in
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world. Girls usually attend
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which
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they can care
others
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for others
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,
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, boys get universities'
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for fixing and building.
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,
students
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can be qualified employees as their own desire.
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of the perfect examples of
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is
President
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of Meriton company. His mother pushed him to be a
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pianist
, but he believed himself to be
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an engineering
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engineering
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. Now he is
one
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of the
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billioniere
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billionaire
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of
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Australia as
his
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he
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wants.
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and even more importantly, though, universities could not start their first day of school in the
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of
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century if they announce
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number
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of girls and boys in
one
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class
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. In simple terms, male pupils rarely choose early childhood teaching.
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, some
of
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new
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students
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can not start their
lesson
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on time.
One
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of the
petfect
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perfect
examples of
this
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is
Mongolian
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the Mongolian
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University of Technology. Two decades before Mongolian government decided equal
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of new
students
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in
automative
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automotive
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engineering
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class
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classes
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. 20 male attendees already have chosen the
class
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but only 2 female mentees had booked the lesson. Regarding
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Parliament
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announcement boys could not start their subject on time
untill
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until
President banned it. By way of conclusion, I once again restate my view that
equal
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an equal
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number
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of
girl
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girls
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and
boy
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boys
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students
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can not attend
in
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apply
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every single subject.
Therefore
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, it is recommended that teenagers should choose what they want.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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