Some schools are very strict about their school uniforms and the appearance of their pupils, while other schools have a very relaxed dresscode. What are the advantages and disadvantages of children of having a school uniform?

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In
this
era of technology, some educational institutions are quite strict about its
uniform
or
student's
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attire
while
other schools seem very casual in
term
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of their
dresscode
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dress code
. From my personal point of view,
school
uniforms increase safety
however
people with financial issues find it very hard
follow
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the rules.
This
essay will
further
elaborate
both
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benefits and drawbacks of pupils having a
school
uniform
. The first and foremost benefit of wearing
school
outfit
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outfits
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is that
it
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they
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increase safety among
students
.
For example
, as
students
apply
school
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attires
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, they can
be easily recognise
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from a distance based on their tie colour, shoes and name tag.
Therefore
, someone can be easily identified whether he or she is a member of particular
institutions
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or not. Other than that, during a trip day, pupils can be easily spotted among crowds thanks to their
uniform
.
Thus
, it will reduce the chance of getting kidnapped or
attack
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by criminals as
public
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have an eye on them.
Moreover
, explaining some of the drawbacks of
this
issue are
students
with limited financial abilities cannot afford to buy
a
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school uniforms
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school
uniforms. Since their parents
also
need to consider other expenses
such
as annual education fees, necessities and rental fees, they find it hard to buy a complete outfit for their
love
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ones.
Moreover
,
school
uniform
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uniforms
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can be uncomfortable sometimes especially when the temperatures are warm outside. Some
of
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institutions
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the institutions
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required
students
to wear suits or jackets which are not cosy as t-shirts or shorts.
Thus
, it shows
lack
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of freedom among
students
. In the nutshell, despite
school
outfits
improve
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safety rates and
looks
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looking
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more
organise
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, other parties with low income
unable
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are unable
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to enjoy its benefits. Hopefully, the government will take
an
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apply
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appropriate actions to mitigate
this
problem in the future.
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