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politicians are more responsible for protecting of the environment than individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#politicians #environment #individuals
There is no doubt
politicans
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politicians
politics
plays
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 an important role to build a nation but here, some people are saying that social leaders are more responsible to protect the
environment
 than
public
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the public
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. I
am partially agree
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partially agree
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 with the given notion. I will discuss my viewpoints with examples and
conclusion
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a conclusion
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. First and foremost,
politicians
 are the famous person in society and country because people give
the
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their
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 votes to their favourite leaders, because of
this
, individuals
are
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like to follow those leaders so
that
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apply
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if
politicians
 will protect
environment
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the environment
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then
 people will
also
 begin to follow those persons and they will
also
 contribute to
protect
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protecting
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 the
environment
,
as a result
,
politicians
 could become role model for the public.
Furthermore
,
politicians
 can start different kinds of awareness programmes for the public
such
 as, how they can secure the
environment
 from pollution and other issues owing to
this
 fact,
masses
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the masses
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 will grow more and more plants in their surroundings and they can get
good
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a good
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environment
 which will be free from harmful gasses. To cite an example, in India,
politicians
 start to provide
the
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apply
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plants on special days to
public
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the public
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 and it is
great
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a great
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 idea to grow the plants.
On the other hand
, it should be the responsibility of everyone to protect
environment
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the environment
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 not only the
politicians
 because if everyone will give
their
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they're
they are
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contribute
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contribution
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 to
secure
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securing
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 the
environment
then
 they can get
safe
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a safe
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 and clean
environment
.
Moreover
,
politicians
 always have some other tasks that could be related to
economic
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the economic
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 conditions of the country and other issues, so they cannot give proper attention towards protecting the
environment
.
Consequently
, individuals should understand their responsibility
about
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to
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 the
environment
 and they should not create any pollution in
environment
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the environment
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. In conclusion, I believe that
politicians
 can give
right
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the right
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 pathways to protect the
environment
 to
public
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the public
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 as they will follow that or
politicians
 should enforce some laws and regulations towards protecting the
environment
. And,
public
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the public
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 should
also
 give
their
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them
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 confer to secure their surroundings.
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