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Some people think history has little or nothing to offer, while others say the study of the past helps us understand the present. Discuss both the viewpoints and give your opinion.

#people #history #offer #study #viewpoints
The revolution of technology in recent times drove
people
 to consider some subjects to be irrelevant to the current needs of the world. One of the
subject
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 which is under heavy criticism is
history
.
While
 some
preceive
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perceive
receive
 that
study
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the study
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 of
history
 keeps
people
 connected to their culture
while
 some believe that it is not the most intriguing and reliable
subject
. Most of the research programs are based on the data recorded in the past which is
further
 enhanced by applying technology which leads to incredible discoveries.
For example
, the masterpiece 'Book of medicine' written by a
16th century
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 scientist Avicenna created an impetus for the knowledge of
the
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biological science to be
further
 developed.
Furthermore
,
people
also
 believe that
study
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 of
history
 brings
masses
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 closer to realise their roots and emboldens their cultural heritage. Ever since the famous TV show 'Vikings' was broadcasted on
the
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television, the Nordic communities have started to adhere to their roots.
Although
 there are upsides
of
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 studying
history
but
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some believe there are far more downsides. Some believe that the
study
 of
history
 is extremely boring and hard to focus
.
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 Many school students may end up losing their interest in education which eventually creates a negative impact on
the
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society.
In addition
 to that,
people
 often use
this
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 phrase '
History
 will glorify hunters until the lion learns to write' to voice their concerns that the
study
 of
history
 which is available to us is corrupted
an
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 morphed by those in power in the past which makes it an unreliable
subject
. In conclusion, both sides have genuine reasoning behind their opinions on whether
history
 should be taught or not. Some find that
history
 is so boring that it may discourage school children from education
while
 others state that it helps in
advancement
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 of human civilisation.
However
, I strongly believe that
history
 is an important
subject
 which can help us in carrying forward
the
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human heritage and knowledge.
Submitted by Mohammed Danishuddin on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • anachronistic
  • cultural heritage
  • perspective
  • historical context
  • societal norms
  • contemporary
  • evolution
  • progress
  • modern advancements
  • conflicts
  • tensions
  • academic
  • practical skills
  • subjective
  • victors
  • marginalized groups
  • dwelling on the past
  • irrelevant
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