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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012
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The line graph illustrates the changing rates of crime in the inner city from 2003 to 2012.
Overall
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, the
burglary
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 dropped significantly over the period,
whereas
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the
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car
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theft
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 and the
robbery
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 remain stable. It can be clearly seen that
the
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burglary
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 accounted for almost 3500 incidents in 2003,
while
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the
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car
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theft
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 and the
robbery
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 stood at under 3000 occurrences.
In addition
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,
the
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burglary
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 reached a peak at about 3800 happenings in 2004, and
then
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 it decreased sharply to over 1000
cases
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 in the following four years.
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,
the
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car
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theft
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 had the same trend, and it took over
the
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burglary
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 in mid-2006. By 2012, the
burglary
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 had levelled off to around 1400 incidents, and
the
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car
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theft
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 had increased slowly
at
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to
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 about 2800
cases
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. For the
robbery
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 case, it stood at over 500
cases
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 at the first of the year.
Moreover
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, by 2012,
the
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robbery
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 had remained stable in the same
cases
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 as
the
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in the
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 first period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words burglary, car, theft, robbery, cases with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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