Some people say that advertising has positive economic effects. Others think it has negative social effects because it will make people feel dissatisfied with who they are and what they have. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Advertising is more significant progress in the economy.
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gives information about products to customers.
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believe that advertising has positive economic effects, others strongly recommend that
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has negative social effects.
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both these views in support of the latter. On the one hand, it can be said that advertising
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dangerous for
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see products and
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health.
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falsification
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the internet and
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processing is
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harmful
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. Another disadvantage is that improving
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in the wrong direction by
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media companies give data about
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crops and that situation is causing
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governments
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the field.
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that
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effect
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advertising has
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to
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the economy. Certain
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commercial business need
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ad
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, for the reason they
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income by advertising,
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the crops reach
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of revenue ,
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using the
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the information all companies
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utilise
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and next a decade that will be more. In conclusion, advertising has both positive and negative effects so,
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benefit for
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but if they must be careful and
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way. I hope
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years
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government is more
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awareness
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this
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area.
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