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The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below

The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below
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The table and chart show
people
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 travelling abroad and why they travelled for the period 1994-98. Specifically, the table illustrates figures for tourists from the United Kingdom who visit abroad for different reasons.
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 the bar graph illustrates the
number
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 of abroad
visitors
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 in Western Europe, North America and other areas. Looking at the figure for UK abroad
visitors
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. The total
number
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 of
visitors
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 was continue growing from 1994 to 1998 except in 1995. In 1994, there were 22,072 UK
visitors
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 who went abroad, and in 1998,
this
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number
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 was raised to 28,828. The holiday is the most popular reason that
people
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 what to go abroad.
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, only 1/7 to 1/5 of
people
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 go abroad because of business and visits to friends and relatives. The figure in the bar graph shows that In the statistics for
people
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 going abroad, the
number
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 of
people
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 from Western Europe occupies a dominant position.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, number, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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