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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table shows data about the subway line structure in six countries.
Overall
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, it is
noticable
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noticeable
notable
 that
because
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apply
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the
metro
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 is more important for states. Actually big
city
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cities
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 need complex and useful
metro
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station
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stations
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, for the reason,
this
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 is fast and
unexpensive
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inexpensive
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.
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Moreover
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 that
trasport
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transport
 system was created 19 century.
Firstly
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table
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the table
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illustrate
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illustrates
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 data about
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the
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underground railway system in six cities from 1863 to 2001. Namely, London, Paris, Tokyo, Washington
DC
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,
Kyoto
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 and Los Angeles. London railway the oldest
histroy
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history
in addition
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 to that was created
by
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in
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 1863.
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Moreover
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this
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metro
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 has a big portion in
kilometres
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 of
route
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 number is 394 and 775
million
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 passengers
using
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use
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in
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it
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 per
year
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. In
the
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apply
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second place is Paris
thus
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,
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metro
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the metro
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 opened in 1900 and
kilometres
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 of
route
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 199 so each
year
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 1191
million
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 humans
using
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use
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 them. In
the
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third place is Tokyo and the
metro
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 was opened in 1927
therefore
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,
this
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 has 155
kilometres
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 of
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route
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the route
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 every
year
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 so 1927
million
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 persons utilise
per
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it per
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year
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.
Secondly
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, Washington
DC
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,
Kyoto
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,
Los
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and Los
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 Angeles subway
station
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stations
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 opened
1976
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in 1976
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, 1981 and 2001 years respectively.
Nevertheless
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 in
kilometres
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 of
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route
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the route
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 had been Washington
DC
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 126,
Kyoto
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 11,
Los
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and Los
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 Angeles 28 .
Next
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The next
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 category is passengers per
year
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 using that so
this
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a
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apply
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number is
DC
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 144
million
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,
Kyoto
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 just under 50
million
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 and LA 50
million
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words metro, dc, kyoto, kilometres, route, million, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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