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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table shows data about the subway line structure in six countries.
Overall
, it is
noticable
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noticeable
notable
 that
because
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the
metro
 is more important for states. Actually big
city
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cities
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 need complex and useful
metro
station
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stations
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, for the reason,
this
 is fast and
unexpensive
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inexpensive
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.
Moreover
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 that
trasport
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transport
 system was created 19 century.
Firstly
table
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the table
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illustrate
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illustrates
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 data about
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underground railway system in six cities from 1863 to 2001. Namely, London, Paris, Tokyo, Washington
DC
,
Kyoto
 and Los Angeles. London railway the oldest
histroy
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history
in addition
 to that was created
by
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in
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 1863.
Moreover
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this
metro
 has a big portion in
kilometres
 of
route
 number is 394 and 775
million
 passengers
using
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in
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it
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 per
year
. In
the
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second place is Paris
thus
,
metro
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the metro
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 opened in 1900 and
kilometres
 of
route
 199 so each
year
 1191
million
 humans
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 them. In
the
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third place is Tokyo and the
metro
 was opened in 1927
therefore
,
this
 has 155
kilometres
 of
route
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the route
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 every
year
 so 1927
million
 persons utilise
per
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it per
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year
.
Secondly
, Washington
DC
,
Kyoto
,
Los
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and Los
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 Angeles subway
station
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stations
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 opened
1976
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in 1976
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, 1981 and 2001 years respectively.
Nevertheless
 in
kilometres
 of
route
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the route
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 had been Washington
DC
 126,
Kyoto
 11,
Los
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and Los
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 Angeles 28 .
Next
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 category is passengers per
year
 using that so
this
a
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number is
DC
 144
million
,
Kyoto
 just under 50
million
 and LA 50
million
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words metro, dc, kyoto, kilometres, route, million, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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