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Advertising has become an unavoidable part of everyone's life. Some people say that advertising is positive part of our lives while other say it is a negative one. Discuss both views and include your own opinion

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It is often held that
such
 marketing elements as posters, target ad on websites and modern video clips on TV has entered human everyday life ,
however
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 some
people
 believe that there are more merits of
this
 influence than flaws.
This
 essay will discuss both these points of view and argue in favour of the latter. On the one hand, advertisements can help
people
 to find better options in business,
as well as
 in everyday life. Possibly seen, surfing the web or glancing at a colossal billboard, a hot offer can stay in mind and later become a sudden solution for a problem.
For example
, some office worker is too busy to clean the floor himself, and
then
 someday he sees a billboard where a new vacuum cleaner robot is advertised.
Thus
 he has solved his issue about cleaning effortlessly.
On the other hand
,
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promotion has many drawbacks, mostly because it surrounds us everywhere and we cannot do much to prevent it. The advert could be annoying and cause irritation, especially on the internet where it is often hard to close it. It is obvious that a marketing specialist’s goal is to sell
people
 his product.
Therefore
, smooth banners boost
people
's interest and lead to purchasing unnecessary things. In my opinion,
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promotion has more disadvantages than benefits because it is not a thing of both sides accept.
For instance
, I have not agreed to see some flying images on my browser but they appear, in what I think is a disruption of personal freedom.
To conclude
, the advertisement has a strong positive influence, helping
people
 to deal with many cases in their everyday life.
However
, I believe that it has become a huge threat to freedom of the personality which should be appreciated nowadays more than the interests of the marketing manager.
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