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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In my country, young people have better lives than their parents had when they were young. Use reasons and examples to support your answer?

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Over time, human lifestyles have consistently changed for the better, making life easier and more comfortable. In my country, I fully agree that
today
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's youth have a better quality of life compared to their
parents'
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 generation. There are several reasons why I believe
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 is the case.
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's teenagers have
access
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 to better quality
food
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 than their predecessors, with more variety, better nutrition, and tastier options that improve not only their academic performance but
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 their happiness. In the past, the diet of young
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 was mainly determined by their place of residence, leading to a monotonous
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 intake,
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today
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's adolescents have greater freedom to choose foods that are best suited to their individual needs.
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, in the past, the parent who lived near the beach, generally just gave sea
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food
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 for their kids,
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’s parents can give optional
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 depending on what their children need.
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's parents can give their children foods rich in DHA,
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 as fish or eel, to enhance their brain function and
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 health. Improved mobility has made it easier for
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's young
people
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 to travel wherever they want, for leisure or other purposes. Well-maintained roads
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 motorized vehicles are easily available because of low prices, making it easier for
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 to travel.
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, even if they lived in the highland, nowadays they can move efficiently to the coastline for holiday. Had young
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 in the past had
access
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 to the same affordable and efficient transportation options available
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, their quality of life would have been improved. Despite higher pollution levels in
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's environment, young
people
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 still have
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 to various health support facilities, including sports and green areas that offer amenities
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 as running tracks, basketball courts, and free gym equipment. When teenagers need some exercise to boost their body condition, they can freely go there.
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, I completely agree that the improved
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 to
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, transportation, and health facilities available to
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's adolescents represents a significant improvement over the conditions experienced by previous generations.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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