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Teachers are not as important as they used to be because of the choice of other alternatives for students, such as online teaching. To what extent to do you agree of disagree?

#teachers #choice #alternatives #students
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 of materials that kids can use to learn. By using an online application or by browsing the web one can attain new knowledge just by watching videos or reading
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 helpful for students especially those that are working
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professors is still a good option to gain knowledge. Educators may adjust their way of teaching
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kids that are having a hard time.
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 other people mostly students that are introverts, mingling with other people is
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological revolution
  • access to information
  • self-learning
  • personalized learning paths
  • learning styles
  • one-size-fits-all approach
  • traditional classrooms
  • flexibility
  • online education
  • commitments
  • social skills
  • emotional intelligence
  • mentorship
  • support
  • blended learning
  • guiding
  • facilitating
  • enhancing
  • quality of education
  • inspire and motivate
  • holistic educational experience
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