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some people believe they should keep all the money they have earned and should not pay tax to the state. Do you agee or disagree?

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There is no doubt that some people propound that the income they earned should not be paid for
tax
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 to their nations.
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 essay will elaborate on the viewpoints as I partially agree with the statement. On the one hand, it is considered by many that the harder they work, the more money they should be paid. To explain
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, since individuals plan for their retirement or investment,
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, they are likely to keep
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money as much as possible, rather than paying for tax.
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, in some countries, members of society are avoiding paying a huge amount of taxes by allocating their cash to charities or non-government organizations.
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 is because,
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 countries, governments cannot provide their citizens
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better standard of livings like in most developed nations.
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, it totally makes sense that the salaries they are paid should be kept as they wish confidentially.
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,
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 policies are compulsory in many regions worldwide, which
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helps improve
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society in various ways.
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, if there are no
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 measures, needless to say, there will be no major development in a nation.
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 will lead to social problems as major infrastructures, namely hospitals, schools, and public service sectors, are resulting
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a
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myriad
unavoidable
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of unavoidable
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 troubles.
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 why everyone should pay their taxes to their authority regularly. In Scandinavian regions, governments facilitate a high standard of
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, which is vital because
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a member
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member
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members
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 of the public will find it worthwhile spending their incomes
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 the society they reside in. In conclusion, some realize that they should pay their taxes to the state in order to enhance basic
infrastuctures
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infrastructures
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 in their native lands.
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, I have a partial agreement with
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 notion because sometimes individuals are supposed to allocate their money
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 certain purposes they desire.
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