Advertising discourages people from being different individuals by making us all want to do the same and look the same. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Advertisement has become a business now. All the companies use different platforms and tactics to advertise and attract the general public. In

this

regard, social media has played an important role.

However

, I completely agree with the statement that people follow trends and want to look the same. In

this

essay, I will try to discuss different reasons why is it so. First of all, social media

such

as Facebook, Instagram,

youtube

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YouTube

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etc have become the platform for marketing products which is easy to access for the wide majority now.

Furthermore

, on Instagram, these companies are now collaborating with individuals called "Influencers" to advertise their products.

For example

, when a company launches their new product they send free samples to these influencers that in return make a video for them and post it on different platforms to attract the public. So, when people watch their videos and

saw

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different popular personalities using them, they

also

want to look the same and follow the trend.

On the other hand

this

trend results in several negative impacts on society.

Firstly

, by

following

this

trend people are now losing their identity.

Secondly

, everyone wants to look like a celebrity and a perfect body shape, colour, and skin has become popular ultimately resulting in depression, stress, and anxiety issues in young adults.

Thirdly

, it's a waste of money. It's a common concept among the public that if they wear more branded clothes, they will look rich and upper-class.

To conclude

, I agree that advertising discourages the public from being different individuals and in my opinion, the internet and social media are the main reason behind it. It is affecting individuals in several negative ways.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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4 paragraphs

280 words

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