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Some parents think computer games are better for children and they should be allowed to play more of them. whereas some parents argue that they are harmful to children.Do you think advantages outweight disadvantages.

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With the emergence of information technology, many parents claim that
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 their
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learns
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 certain skill sets through
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games
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 increasing trend possesses more cons than pros, which will be covered in
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. On one hand, parents think that with the usage of computers, their offsprings learn technology skills more effectively and rapidly,
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 they think that certain
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 improve and promote intelligence in their
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 which adds to their capabilities to tackle different problems. It is observed that
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 feel relaxed and entertained by playing
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games
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, using a
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 for a longer time has devastating effects on the health of younglings. One of the cons of using a
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 for a long affects the eyesight of pupils. Research conducted by British Health Ministry on people having power vision stated that over 30% of people who uses
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 develop poor vision among them.
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 playing
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 on a
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 rather than playing physical
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 brings social isolation among pupils and it causes a lack of interaction with society.
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, not playing physical
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 promotes laziness among pupils and one study found that not indulging in physical activities is the main cause of obesity among youngsters. It is
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 observed that
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 playing
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children
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 often forget to do homework and show less interest in performing academic activities. In conclusion, it is indisputable that
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 brings several advantages and disadvantages.
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 negative impact on the social and health growth of younglings.
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