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Nowadays many buildings such as offices and schools have open space design rather than seprate rooms. why is this so? is it a positive or negative development

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In
this
 contemporary era, countless architectural styles as
work places
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 and educational institutions have halls than different cabins.
This
 issue is caused by various factors. To my mind, it is an unwelcome development.
To begin
 with, the major reason why designers build
open space
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open-space
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 buildings rather than separate sections is to save money and
time
. To elaborate
it
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, if people want to construct
separation
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 rooms, it needs more material which can be expensive and
it
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consumes more
time
.
However
, hall construction
are
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 easily completed as compared to
sepration
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separation
 cabins
along with
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it erected
in
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reasonable
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a reasonable
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 budget.
For example
, a survey conducted by Harward University revealed that in India 65% of individuals had been constructing
open space
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 style buildings as it is good for them to save their capital and precious
time
.
Hence
, it is beneficial for those people who build that types of structures. In my opinion, the main negative impact is that area would be noisy and disturbing.
In other words
, when teachers teach their students, they would create noise among other learners and they
distrub
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disturb
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 some students read loudly in their classroom.
Consequently
, other classes of tutees could disturb as
they
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 unable to concentrate on their
study
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studies
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.
Similarly
, in offices, employees make
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a plan
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plan
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 for their
further
 work, but other workers talk with their
coustomers
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customers
 about their product or anything with
this
 they may distract and
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an
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overall
 performance and outcome of industries.
Therefore
, there
are
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 an unfavourable impact on
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the country
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country
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 development
as well as
 they can face many
problem
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problems
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 in
upcoming
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the upcoming
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time
 period.
To conclude
, I would like to assert
thet
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that
although
 human beings may save
their
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time
 and cash if they will build open space design, there are many bad
effect
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effects
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 on their future life.
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