The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates how
thisprocess consists of four main stages: farming, crushing, separating and drying.
It is clear that
the first step isto grow
sugarcane and it takes around 12 to 18 months for it to mature. After it has fully grown, it is harvested manually or mechanically. To be more precise, the manual method involves humans removing the leaves and chopping canes,
whereasthe mechanical method uses tracks directly to cut canes. In terms of the next stage, the harvested canes are crushed in a machine to produce the juice, which is
thenpurified using a limestone filter. After that, the purified juice is heated in the evaporator to remove water and becomes syrup.
Subsequently, the syrup is poured into a centrifuge so that the
sugarcrystals are separated.
Finally, the crystals are dried and cooled and the end product is
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