The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates how
sugar
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manufactures from
sugar
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cane.
Overall
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,
this
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process consists of four main stages: farming, crushing, separating and drying.
It is clear that
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the first step is
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to grow
sugar
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cane and it takes around 12 to 18 months for it to mature. After it has fully grown, it is harvested manually or mechanically. To be more precise, the manual method involves humans removing the leaves and chopping canes,
whereas
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the mechanical method uses tracks directly to cut canes. In terms of the next stage, the harvested canes are crushed in a machine to produce the juice, which is
then
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purified using a limestone filter. After that, the purified juice is heated in the evaporator to remove water and becomes syrup.
Subsequently
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, the syrup is poured into a centrifuge so that the
sugar
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crystals are separated.
Finally
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, the crystals are dried and cooled and the end product is
sugar
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • sugar cane
  • harvesting
  • transporting
  • factory
  • crushing
  • extracting
  • juice
  • filtering
  • impurities
  • heating
  • evaporating
  • syrup
  • boiling
  • crystallizing
  • sugar
  • separating
  • drying
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • stage
  • process
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