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Some hold the view that ideas and information should be completely open, and there should be no control on what people can read and watch in the media (TV, newspaper, Internet) Do you agree with this view, or do you think that in some circumstances governments should limit the freedom of the media?

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Nowadays, most population of the world get the information they need from the media,
such
 as TVs and the internet. Most societies would prefer
this
 information to be completely open.
However
, it is believed that the authority should restrict access to anything confidential. In
this
 essay, I will explain why I agree with
this
 statement and I will support my opinion with examples. First and foremost, most of the widely distributed sources on the Internet are banned by the authority, because most of the news or similar broadcast is not true, which means that many of them are written to attract individuals. The strict restriction of
this
 by the government plays a key role in human lives
,
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 because all kinds of false accounts cause stress in people. Take a recent study in Congo as an example, the number of unreliable data releases has increased dramatically in the
last
 year, and
as a result
, almost 40 per cent of the population is suffering from stress.
On the other hand
, many people think that the law should not restrict the viewing of
such
 materials,
that is
 to say, if they are restricted, individuals will not be able to find the materials they want through various websites or other sources on the Internet.
However
,
although
 some resources are viewable by parents, they are still prohibited for immatures, so it is said that parents, not the government, should restrict only their minors.
To sum up
, the authority is responsible for limiting information in the media, because parents cannot ban democratic or similar resources there.
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