The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion.

The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion.
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The given graph illustrates the expenditure of UAE authority in the year 2000. Looking from an
overall
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perspective, it seems evident that social security accounted for the predominant share of the total budget( 315
billion
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)
while
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the opposite figure can be seen in transport. Regarding the chart, there were 100
billion
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AED spent on social security, more than a quarter,
whereas
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transport took up just 9
billion
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, much lower than the former one.
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, the three categories law and order, industry, agriculture and employment, housing the heritage and environment had a similar amount of money, which were 17, 13 and 15
billion
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respectively. Turning to the other features, spending on health and personal social services was the second greatest on the chart, with 53
billion
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AED, higher than education by 15
billion
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. There were 22
billion
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for defence, which was followed by dept interest with 1
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higher than that.
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, another expenditure was relatively considerable with 23
billion
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AED.
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