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Although the prices of fuels have greatly increased over the last decade or two, it is argued that further increases in fuel prices are the only way to reduce world consumption of fuel and lessen pressure on the world’s fuel resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words

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The constant increase in fuel prices has become the most controversial topic in recent years. Some people believe that rising costs will benefit global gas resources by reducing consumption.
However
, in my opinion, there are too many disadvantages compromising
this
 thesis,
such
 as limited alternatives for public transportation and the domino effect that follows. To start with, I would like to emphasize the importance of public transportation as a replacement for private vehicles, which usage is expected to be decreased. In order to make progress towards
this
 movement, alternative public transit should be provided.
However
, till now, many towns and villages still have been suffering from insufficient development of public transportation,
such
 as buses connecting people to work; or train lines taking residents back home from the city.
Similarly
, the cost of the already existing public transport has been enormous for poor users, who decide to find the cheapest solution, like
for example
, a carpool, where people share the rides.
Furthermore
, the top of the iceberg is the domino effect, which can be visible on a global scale. With the gas prices increase, a chain of reaction occurs,
such
 as a dramatic rise in food costs and other products,
for example
, cars, building materials, housing expenses that follow, and so on.
This
 can only lead to global economic crises. In conclusion, even though rising fuel prices could have a small impact on global consumption of fossil fuels, in the long scale, it will bring a failure of the economic system
due to
 the lack of alternative public transit,
as well as
 the domino effect of rising figures in all other sectors, leading to the global crisis.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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